Strengths and Weaknesses

I was overall pretty pleased with my performance on this first essay. I was happy that my thesis sentence was noted as a strength, as this is what my paper was based on. A couple of my body paragraphs were highlighted as strong paragraphs-ones in which I integrated ideas and made claims of my own. These paragraphs, I believe, exhibit important analysis. Although it's clear that I have the right idea in these body paragraphs, in the others I see where I fall short. Short, in-concise sentences and the list like quality of them leave these paragraphs feeling empty. I agree that it's critical for me to introduce more analysis and more of my own unique ideas instead of simply stating Austen's. The conclusion, which should really be a strong ending to my paper was not as strong as it could of been and I will work on making it a finale rather than a lackluster wrap up. I was annoyed by my grammatical mistakes because most of them were really silly(inappropriate use of semicolon, indentation, and the plural). These things are easily corrected with more careful editing and I am confident I will improve this aspect of my paper next time.